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There are two aspects to look at the talented people. Some people
claim that people are gifted when they were born, and they can have abilities to
do sports, music and even mathematics or science naturally. However, the others assert
that it is possible to learn these skills, while children are growing up. I am
going to look at the two views and figure it out what has more possibility.
It
is believable that people have natural talents, even though they are not taught.
For instance, we can see the people who have surprisingly high IQ that they can
show their abilities in math or science. and >> 문장이 길어서 끊어드렸습니다 Moreover, they think different from to ordinary
people. In addition, sometimes, children who can play instruments on their own
make us astonished. That means geniuses are exists around us and it makes people
amazed.
On the other hand, some people argue that children can learn
anything without a gifted inborn talent. There are many great scholars, musicians, and athletes
who made an effort on their areas to become a veteran person. For example, one
of my friends became a musical actor, although he was originally bad singer originally. He
had practiced for about 10 years and he could be proficient at singing acquire his ability to sing very
well. As my example shows, it is possible that making to make an untalented child a
component person an adept.
To sum up, it is obvious that there are many gifted
people, and they show extremely amazing skills on music, sports, and academic
fields. However, it is feasible that people can have these abilities if they
practice hard on their work. Personally, I tend to agree with the second view
that people can have skills as they do their best on their field. I think it is
very likely that someone, who has talent since he was born, cannot beat someone
who practices every day and for a long time. Even if a boy has a gifted talent
on playing the piano, he cannot be an excellent pianist without making efforts.
마지막 결론 부분에서 cannot beat someone 에 대한 내용은 위에서 찾아보기 어렵다고 생각이 듭니다 결론에서 본론에서 언급되지 않은 내용이 들어간다면 이상하겠죠 전체적인 글의 흐름은 좋았습니다 하지만 결론이 본론의 길이와 비슷하단 점이 아쉽습니다
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