▶ Your Answer :
The diagram shows the levels of internet
users in UK, separated by intentions, between 2007 and 2009.
Overall, there was a general increase in
use of internet for most almost purposes in this chart, such as shopping, banking,
chatting, video game and TV. However, the other two sections <(which other two? be specific) showed a decrease in
books and learning sections.
The highest increase of the percentage was
in the shopping and banking categories, which saw an increase of about 10%.
Internet user for shopping increased from 41% in 2007 to 55% in 2009. And the
figure for banking went up from 35% in 2007 to 45% in 2009. Other purposes such
as chatting, video games and TV use slightly grew by below 10%.
On the other hand, internet use for books
and learning decreased between 2007 and 2009. In terms of books, it showed a
decline from 37% in 2007 to 30% in 2009, which decreased by 7%. And the figure
of learning reduced from 30% to 25%. Two sections described a small changes
compared to other increased sections.
Score: 7.5 Comment: 정보를 잘 전달해주셨습니다. Specificity에 조금 더 신경을 써주시면 될 것 같습니다. 또한 비교를 조금 더 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 예를 들어 어느 부분에서 인터넷을 제일 많이/적게 사용했는지 전달을 해주실수 있습니다. 수고 하셨습니다. |