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People have different opinions on how to get specific talents in music or sports. While some people assert that they are innate talents, other argue that people can develop such talents through education. I believe that anyone can be a professional musician or sports player by learning some techniques.
On the one hand, it is true that some talents cannot be obtained by learning. Some talents, such as musical senses and outstanding physical conditions are inborn capabilities that people cannot develop them by themselves. Mozart, a historical talented composer, is a prime example; he started to play the piano from a very young age before learning how to play an instrument. This was possible because his natural musical senses allowed him to understand how to play music. On the other hand, some argue that any youngster can learn such talents and become a talented person. Musical or sport techniques, also part of talents to become a professional person, cannot be a natural ability but they have to obtained by education: how to read notes, what the rules are or how not to make mistakes. For example, Park Chan Ho, who is considered as one of the greatest Korean baseball player, became a professional player after being taught how to play the baseball and practicing skills without any natural talent.
In conclusion, although some people are born with special talents, any student can become a professional person in sports or music by learning its techniques. I believe that anyone has chance to become a talented person in certain areas through education.
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