▶ Your Answer :
The chart given depicts the number of
visitors to the two newly opened music web sites which are ‘Music Choice’ and ‘Pop
Parade’ from day1 to day15.
In general, except 12th and 13th
days, ‘Pop Parade’ maintained consistent dominant position above ‘Music Choice’
reaching almost 170000 visitors at the 15th day after opening.
However, both of sites were experienced continuing fluctuations.
In terms of ‘Pop parade’, the figure showed
gradual decreasing tendency for the first week from 120000 visitors to 30000
visitors. However, for the next 1 week, the figure surged to its highest point
to 170000 visitors after overcoming sudden big drop between 11th day
and 13th day.
When it comes to ‘Music Choice’, the number
of visitors was increased 50% on third day compared to the first day until the 3rd
day. After this short increase, the figure was just waving around 30000 visitors
until 11th day. After 11th day, it showed a significant
increase for a day reversing the dominant position of with ‘Pop Parade’ to 13th
day. However, while the figure of ‘Pop Parade’ was more than doubled, the number of visitors
of ‘Music Choice’ was decreased to almost half of its figure at the same
period.
ELTS 1-9 score scale score: 7.5 good user
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