▶ Your Answer :
The given pie charts illustrates how
changed the music media played via several different instruments changed over a 20-year period 20
years between 1990 and 2010.
In brief, what stands out from chart is
that compact disk is accounted for the highest figure at early decades, while
the popular music instrument is replaced with digital audio at the latest decade.
In more detail, the most music was played
through the compact disk was possessed with 55 percent in 1990, and then it was
hugely increased with the majority of the music player with to 95 percent in 2000.
In addition, the cassette and vinyl record were remained had similar percentages
with 25 percent and 20 percent respectively in 1990.
On the other hand, the digital audio was
the least used in 2000 with 5 percent, compared to the figure of 2010 which was
significantly went up to 60 percent. In spite of the CD being was the most used until
2000, it was plunged to 35 percent in 2010. Besides, the minor people of 5
percent used the vinyl record in 2010.
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