▶ Your Answer :
The bar graph represents graphs
represent the number of students who used the internet by its gender at Redwood
Secondary school between 1995 and 2002. Overall, the internet
used by students has increased drastically until 1998 and after that, the
number of students using the internet used fluctuated. was slowed down. Initially the number of boys who used
the internet was dominant than that of girls. However , however this the number of girls steadily increased
and reached at a similar level by the end of the projected periods.
This The number increased
substantially for both genders, but the boy's number was in a dominant in the
internet usage. However, the boy's number in internet usage was dropped in 1998 where it reached at about 290, while 300 girls were used the internet. dropped라고 표현하면 이전년도에 비해서 감소했다고 해석되기 쉬워요. 여학생들의 수보다 적어졌다거나 여학생들의 수가 우위를 점했다거나 하는 식으로 표현하는 게 더 정확합니다. This is
when the number of boys used the internet is started to fluctuate.
From 1999, the number
of boys who used the internet recorded at just over 300 boys, whereas girls
experienced a drop in its usage to reach at below 300 girls. The number of
students for both genders increased steadily to reach at a similar level of well
over 300 students by 2000, despite the drop in the internet use for girls in
2001.
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