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피드백을 받고, outweigh 유형을 한번 더 써보았습니다^^
In recent years,
a number of people tend to prefer to enjoy ready-made foods rather than to make
their own ones. I think that the disadvantages of this progress are outweighed by
the advantages.
To begin with,
there are two major drawbacks of ready-made foods compared with foods made by people
by themselves. Firstly, it may lead to a simplication of taste because they might
be adapted to only a few kinds of ready to eat foods and be not used to producing
their particular ones. Secondly, people could not take a great advantage from cooking
as a creative activity. They would lose the chances to improve their creativity
by performing it. Without it, thus, they may lose a significant part of their
life.
In spite of
the benefits (이런 오류가 나지 않도록 주의해주세요!) of ready-made food that I mentioned above, I believe that the merits
of ready to eat foods prevail over the demerits. (여기는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.) Above all, it is extremely more
convenient for people busy working or studying to eat foods made than cooked ones.
This is because they could substantially enhance their productivity by focusing
on their tasks, after having the foods quickly. Moreover, it would be beneficial
for gender inequality because it could encourage women who were responsible for cooking
in the past to spend more time performing tasks in the workplaces not the houses.
In addition, ready-made foods would be useful for people who are not good at cooking.
They would be able to enjoy delicious foods that they cannot make. Therefore, the foods can
have significant positive effects on the majority of people's quality of life.
In conclusion,
in my opinion, the new social trend of eating ready to have foods have more benefits
than the backfires.
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