The idea of how to deal with bad situations
has always been a subject of debate. Some people argue that it is best to
accept that situations such s an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money while
others feel that we better try to do something to improve such situations. Although
arguments on both side are worth exploring, I think that it is better to overcome
poor situations.
On the one hand, those who believe we
should accept bad situations have valid reasons. When they got people get an unsatisfactory job
after trying tried to be employed for long time, they will likey to do not want to put themselves themself on that stressful job finding situation again. This is because they surly already
spent too much time and efforts to do that. Moreover, if he or she is the only
person who can work among their family, they cannot easily quit quite their work dislike
workplace as they need to support their family with money. Consequently, even
if they know they are facing bad situations, they have no choice but to trying difference
and just accepting that those cases.
On the other hand, there are those who feel
trying and improving bad situations are the better than just give giving up in that
cases. To be specific, we people (가급적이면 1인칭은 최소화해주세요~저 밑에도 마찬가지입니다.) cannot change or improve anything if we just agree
with poor situations what we are facing. For example, to acheive a better condition
than the current one, we should at least do something to escape that situations such as
talking with manager about bad workplace or finding another job if the salary is
too low. Then, we can enjoy a better life than before with our single effort. This
clearly shows that we can change our life with our effort, fighting bad
situations.
In conclusion, we can understand different groups by comparing how they deal with bad situations. Given that situation, I firmly believe that the
best is we must attempt and improve such situations.
총평: (7/6/5/5) 6.0
바로 전 글과 마찬가지로 총점이 6.0이긴 하나, 되게 아슬아슬합니다. TR/CC에서 하나라도 더 까였으면 바로 5점대로 떨어지므로, 이 글을 기준으로 봤을 때는 '어휘', 이 중에서도 철자를 지켜주셔야 해요. 냉정하게 15일 시험 전까지 문법에서 획기적인 발전을 기대하는 것은 불가능할 겁니다. 대신 현재 어휘는 철자만 잘 지켜졌어도 6점으로 올라갈 수 있는 정도니까, 오타를 내지 않도록 주의해주세요~수고하셨습니다 :)
+1인칭의 경우, 싱미님께서 대학 교수라고 생각하시고, 학생들에게 과제물을 받았는데, 이때 1인칭이 남발된 글과 그렇지 않은 글 중 뭐가 더 보기에 예쁜지, 깔끔한지를 생각해보시면 금방 답이 나옵니다. 사실 6.5 이상 목표로 하시는 분들께는 강요의 수준으로 1인칭 쓰지 말라고 말씀드리는 반면, 5점대만 필요하신 분들께는 1인칭의 여부가 중요한 게 아니기 때문에 그냥 권장 정도만 드리는 편이에요. 그러나 6점이 생각보다 되게 애매한 점수라서...저도 강요는 드리지 않겠지만 그래도 일단 참고해주세요. 수고하셨습니다 :)
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