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문제
Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society.
To what extent do you agree with this view.
It has been an enigmatic quandary as to whether some way of advertising is not moral and inappropriate. Having analyzed an invasion of privacy and creating unexpected consume, I state that some adverts market products through unethical and insupportable methods.
As the method of advertising has been more various, people can easily get exposure to the advertisement. The adverts aimed at consumers who do not even know when they produce their personal information such as a phone number, addresses keep people annoyed. The people who are targeted have a trouble with bumbling adverts from internet or over the phone which disturb their work and daily life. Such a way of advertising through information gathered without the consent of consumers is an invasion of privacy.
Furthermore, encouraging demand for products in a provocative way explicitly illustrate the issue at hand. The provocative commercial can frequently be found in some SNS channel. For example, advertisers use the women as a ‘product’ in a sexual way or encourage people to consume junk food which can cause obesity with over expressed picture of the food. These aspects of the advert result in unnecessary purchase which ends up to be a waste of resources. In addition, the advertising can cause such problems with people’s health or secure by promoting alcohol and cigarettes.
In conclusion, the examples of invasion of privacy and encouraging demand for products in a provocative way obviously prove that some advertising methods people use in current society are immoral and unacceptable.