An advertisement has been one of the most influential ways for people to choose some products.(little bit awkward) However, some people are saying that if goods have great quality and they are what people really need(등위 접속사 and necessity to people), advertisements are not necessary(required), and they are just a form of entertainment.(?) On the other hand, others think that advertisements play a vital role in choosing a product because they give information of the items. I also agree with the later(the latter or this opinion) and will discuss both views in this essay.
Those who believe that advertisements are unnecessary base their case on the following arguments. Firstly, people do not see advertisements whenever they buy something which is needed regularly. There are few people who try new products every time they go shopping. Consumers usually purchase goods that they have used (사용한 물건을 산다고 해석됨. so have been using or are using or used )because they think the (these) goods are most suitable for them. In addition, they say that products showed frequently through an advertisement are not always sold the most. Whether a demand for some articles is high or not depends on their quality not advertisements, Thus, high demand for some articles depend on their quality, not advertisement.
However, these days, since lots of various products are coming out to the market, purchasers may make a wrong choice. For that reason,They need certain informations and details of a product before they consume it. As advertisements offer useful information of products, they help people know about the products more exactly. Also(Moreover), It is very reasonable that consumers have a right to use new products. In this case, advertisements are really helpful for consumers to make a decision in for buying something newly produced.
To sum up, advertisements can be a big assistance under the condition of that they are not exaggerated.under the unexaggerated condition It is hoped that consumers take advantage of advertisements properly.(?)
등위 접속사 양쪽엔 같은 절, 구 가 와야합니다. ex) S+V and S+V
다른 문장을 연결할 때는 , and 로 시작하시길.
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