Today, debates on the point whether to use uniforms or not in schools are continuously rising. Some countries have regulations that allow students to wear mufti whilst others firmly request all of those attending schools to be in formal school uniforms. Following paragraphs will describe my own view about the issue.
-와우~. 밑줄빼곤 틀린데가 없쿤요. 음, 사복을 입도록 허락하는 것이니까 해브 레귤레 어쩌구는 불필요한 요소인듯.
In my country, there is a policy illegalizing personal wears in schools. Students must
be dressed tidly in required uniforms. The most important advantage of applying such rules is that pupils are able to concentrate and focus on their studies only. [-맨 마지막 only는 on their studies 앞에 위치 이동 시켜주시고. ]
Youngsters are often disturbed by colorful and stylish clothes as they like to decorate themselves nicely. Because young people tend to be aggressive to be looked grogeous to the opposite sex, they are likely to stay away from studies, instead might waste their time choosing what to wear everytime they go to school. There is of course, no need to announce that settling uniforms for students can prevent this situation.
-문단의 문장들이 같은 내용을 반복하고 조금은 흩어진 느낌이 듬. youngsters 문장의 as후반부 부터는 because문장과 연결시키고 다시 정리하는 게 나을 듯 합니다.
I would also say that It is rightful for students to wear school uniforms from other facts. When students graduate high schools and universities, there are high possibilities for them to wear certain costumes requested by particular workplaces. If one is not
used to these dressing customs, he or she would face many hardships throughout.
So, wearing specific uniforms according to different schools might help pupils to prepare for real society lives as such.
-no misses, :)
Some advantages of wearing mufti are clear, but not as many as benefits students can get when dressed in formal uniforms in schools. I certainly believe nations should make a good policy determing the use of school uniforms. |