The government should impose a fee on drivers who use their vehicles during rush hour to help cut down air pollution from exhaust fumes.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
People have divided views on whether the government should charge the government policy that charging a fee on drivers who use their vehicles during rush hours to help cut down air pollution from exhaust fumes. Some people think that the government policy is unfair. However, I believe that the government policy is necessary for two main reasons, which will be stated below : destory ozone layer and reduce traffic congestion.
First of all, Carbon carbon (제가 과학 쪽 전문가는 아니라 확답은 드리지 못하지만, 아마 이것도 소문자 시작이 맞을 겁니다.) monoxide emitted from exhaust gases is the main cause of ozone layer destruction. To be specific, Carbon carbon monoxide has one oxygen. So, It it is more unstable than carbon dioxide with two oxygen. If carbon monoxide rises near the ozone layer, it takes oxygen away from the ozone and makes it oxygen. As a result, the ozone layer is destoryed. When the ozone layer is destroyed, UV rays exposed to humans are not filtered out and can they be directly exposed to skin cancer.
Moreover, If if the government charge during rush hour, it can expect a decrease in the use of vehicles. When the vehicle is reduced in capacity, traffic congestion during rush hour can be reduced. If a vehicle is charged during rush hour each day, it could be quite a sum on a monthly basis. It is thought that the amount will be burdensome and therefore people will reduce the use of the vehicles.
To sum up, Carbon carbon monoxide emitted from exhaust gases can destory the ozone layer and reduce vehicle usage by charging fee. For these reasons, I firmly believe that the government should impose a fee on drivers who use their vehicles during rush hours.
1. 목표하시는 점수
overall 6.0 - 6.5 each 5.5 이상
2. 다음 시험 예정 날짜
1월 19일 예정
3. 이전에 시험을 치렀을 경우 그때의
시험 본 적 없음
4. 현재 글을 시간을 재고, 아무런 외부의 도움 없이 작성했는지의 여부
시간을 재지 않음 ( 대략 70분 정도 걸림)
5. 기타 현재 상황
처음 작성이라 시간은 재보지 않음
총평: (6/6/6/5) 6.0
시간, Task 1 등을 다 배제하고, 이 글이 시험장에서 그대로 제출되었다고 가정하면 6점까지는 어찌저찌 맞춰질 수 있을 겁니다. 단, 시간이 30분이나 오버되었으며, task 1에서의 필연적인 감점이 있기 때문에 실전에서 총점은 조금 떨어질 것이고요.
대신 틀 자체는 잘 잡아주신 편입니다. 본론에 각각 한 문장씩 추가되면 더 좋았겠지만, 여튼 대략 이런식으로 작성한다고 보시면 됩니다. 시험까지 얼마 남지 않았으므로 슬슬 시간 맞추는 연습도 해주시고, 현실적으로 5.5를 목표로 잡는다고 했을 때, task 1은 그냥 완성에 의미를 두고 task 2 쪽에 훨씬 더 비중을 두시는 게 좋습니다. 수고하셨습니다 :)