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The chart illustrates the percentage of ODA adjusted GDP in six
countries between 2000 and 2002. The amount of it increased one in some countries,
but others dropped slightly.
First off of all >> first off 는 구어체입니다 보통 실생활에서 쓰는 말입니다, the most outstanding feature is the case of Denmark. From
2000 to 2002, the figure of Denmark Danish products decreased slightly, but, nevertheless, Denmark
still had the highest position in all countries,>> 콤마를 없애주세요 at about 1 percent. For
the >> 네덜란드도 the를 붙여줍니다 Netherlands and United Kingdom, they had the same trend of Denmark. >> however는 두 문장을 이어줄 수 없습니다 but으로 이어주시거나 문장이 너무 길어 끊고 however를 써드렸습니다 However,
the percentage was less than Danish one, >> 또한 콤마 빼주세요at about 0.7 and 0.2 respectively. On the
other hand, Ireland, Japan and the USA recorded the rising trend between 2000 and
2002. They reached to more or less 0.4, 0.3 and 0.1 respectively. The case of the
USA was just about 0.1 percent in 2002, as comparing to Denmark, which was a
tenth as little as than Denmark.
To sum up, in surveyed countries, half of them increased and the
others decreased in ODA adjusted GDP from 2000 to 2002. The gap of ODA distributed
between 0.1 and 1 percent.
Denmark 를 너무 많이 쓰고 계시구요 다른 나라들도 다양하게 언급해주시길 바랍니다 USA 네덜란드 필리핀 UK 등엔 the가 붙습니다 보통 united 혹은 복수형의 나라 앞엔 the가 붙습니다
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