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In recent years, contemporary world would argue the effects of part time works of adolescents, citing wheher working is an advantage or a disadvantage for them. I partly agree with the importance of juvenile works and will pose both opinions with some applicable reasons.
To begin with, on the one hand, when people are studying, doing something different can disturb their studies. The main reason is that even though children are using spare time, time for studies will definitely be less than those who are only studying. At that moment, students should concentrate on their studies instead of paid work. Another reason is that the young are still immature to control themselves. If they start to work and earn money, it might be danger for children to be delinquency. To be specific, some students having money spend money on wrongdoings such as alcohol, smoke, or drugs. Additionally, part time work places often deal with juvenile workers badly, like giving no wage.
On the other hand, there are positively other views on juvenile works. Firstly, from young ages a range of experiences can help children to grow up and to adapt real societies. Schools help children aquire knowlege of books. Consequently, they need to practice to earn money as well as to live without parents' supports. Furthermore, if students utilize their spare time when they will not study but will play outside, it is more useful to work for part time because all student are not interested in studies.
To recapitulate, taking into both sets of arguments, I am of the belief that even if some paid work are risky, to experience safely can be a good teacher of children. However, when they are on work, from the government and schools perspective, proper management should be applied to protect children.
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