Although water shortage is becoming a serious concern in many countries, the demand for water by families is rising. This essay will discuss three reasons for this phenomenon and present solutions to tackle water shortage and reduce the amount of water used by families.
First of all, water contamination may be one of the main reasons for this phenomenon. Due to water pollution becoming severe, there is a considerable shortage of potable water. Secondly, droughts are occurring more frequently. Less rain or desertification in various areas including China, Africa and even in the U.S leads to lessening the amount of water to supply. Lastly, higher demand for water than the past is another reason, since urbanization and economic development worldwide allow people to use more water. For example, this financial affordability makes a possibility to purchase more clothes to be washed and to have a garden to be planted. <(water shortage에 대한 이유 보다는 왜 consumption of water이 물이 부족해도 increase하는지에 대해 더 focus를 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. water shortage와 increase consumption of water를 따로 보는게 아니라 하나로 봐야하기 때문에 이미 water shortage가 일어나고 있는데 왜 물 사용을 더 많아지는지 에 대한 질문입니다. )
However, the phenomenon can be ameliorated by raising people’s awareness of lack of water and reducing the waste of water. By giving them warnings, government could force the general public to reduce their water consumption. Secondly, general public also need to play a role by changing their water consumption pattern. For instance, they can are likely to do laundry one time a week, instead of two or three times a week. Lastly, technology could be helpful to solve this problem. Many research projects in the world are conducted to find methods to filter contaminated water as well as to make artificial rain. By funding these research projects, this phenomenon could also be tackled.
In conclusion, water contamination, droughts and urbanization are the reasons for this phenomenon, however this can be ameliorated by encouraging people to save water and developing technologies to decontaminate water.
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