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One of the biggest issues of modern society
is space exploration. It has been debated whether space exploration is worth or
not worth to invest. It is undeniable that exploring space has both advantages
and disadvantages. (이 두 문장은 본질적으로 같은 말을 하고 있으므로 둘 중 하나는 지워주세요~) While there are is some drawbacks to this, I believe that its
benefits are much more valuable.
Admittedly, exploration into space costs a
lot of money. This is because, there are innumerous things to prepare – such as
high-aero technology, machines, worker, and so on. Moreover, universe
exploration has a high risk of failure to fail. A lot of attempts of spaceship launch were
unsuccessful, thus financial loss was occurred. Some people say that there are
no achievement on space-industry. They claim that most of explorations were
failed (여기의 경우도 어느정도 앞의 말을 표현말 살짝 바꿔서 다시 반복한 것이라 좋지 못합니다.) and almost plans of space exploration would be impossible on current
technology.
In spite of its disadvantaged disadvantages, the benefits
of universe exploration outweigh its shortcoming. Firstly, the potential of
space industry is infinite. Many scholars study and pay attention on universe.
They insist that there are so much things to invest and research. For example,
a corporation called ‘Tesla’ has a plan journey into space in 10 years (여기는 조금 중의적인데 어떤 의미로 적어주신 건가요?). After
them, many companies would participate on competition of space travel. In
addition, development of human technology has been broadened from ground to sky.
The next step is the universe naturally. (이 부분을 문단 처음으로 넣는 게 순서상 자연스럽습니다.)
In short, it is evident that the merits of
space exploration are more valuable than the losses. Despite of the risk from
fail, there will get be significant results from space industry. Additionally,
that is not a failure but a process.
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