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The table illustrates German, Italian and British government spending in 2009 as a proportion of the total for five different sectors.
Overall, it is apparent that all three countries spent government expenditure on implementing health policy significantly, whereas they focused on maintaining environment the least in 2009.
Looking at the table more closely, one can see that each German and Italian government similarly used budget on health and public services the most, with representing at 7.1% and 6.6% of the total and 7.5% and 8.6% of the total at each. Following, they spent expenditure by the state in economic affairs and education, remaining at approximately 4%. In addition, the proportion of preserving environment hit a low at less than 1%. Meanwhile, in spite of spending governmental budget on health the most, reaching at 7.8%. Then, the U.K government concentrated on education, which percentage of this field is 6.4%, rather than public services and economic affairs. (표시된 부분 중 첫 문장은 비문임은 확실한데, 정확히 어떤 맥락을 의도하셨는지 모르겠어서 수정이 어렵네요. 해당 문장과 뒷 문장까지 문맥을 적어서 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.) Also, they used budgets on environment protection at just 1%.
총평: (7/6/7/7) 7.0
잘 써주시긴 했는데, 중간에 표시해드린 저 부분은 무조건 수정이 필요하므로 꼭 댓글 주세요~수고하셨습니다 :)
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항상 감사합니다. 비밀번호는 1234입니다.