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■ You should spend about 40 minutes on this task ■ Present a written argument or case to an educated reader no special knowledge of?the?following topic ■ You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant ???evidence ■ You should write at least 250 words | |
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Topic :
Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference. | |
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People learn about life through various experience. Some experiences are from personal experience and others from indirect one. Both of them are important but some people believe that learning through personal experience is much better than others' advices. However, I do not agree with this opinion because a person cannot experience everything through (in) one's whole life. Besides, indirect experience can give you same impact as well as personal experience. I will tell you more in the following blocks.
First of all, there is a limit that a person can experience through his or her own whole life. If you believe that your friends' or family members' advices are not important and your own experience is the only one helpful , you will learn very tiny part about life. People cannot live for more than even 100 years. Besides, you might not recall memories when you were younger than 5 years old and will forget many thing as time goes by. These all make you remember the past very strictly. Because of these reasons, people should listen to what other people say.
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Secondly, more opinions can give you more wisdom. Each(Every) person has each (own) thought. Sometimes, some have same idea about a subject but it is usually various. If you concentrate on what they(other people) say, you will get more knowledge. Knowledge gives you more opportunities that you can think in various situations.( gives you more opportunities to improve ways of thinking?) This gives you not only more wisdom but it reduces the chance of fail also. (This not only gives you more wisdom, but also it reduces...../ ) One of my friends had been hard time because he could not decide what career he should follow when he was grade 12. He asked me what he should do and I told him the most important fact was what he wanted the most.(I told him to follow his heart) He finally decided to go to some college which he graduate he could be a teacher(a college majoring teaching, and he could be a teacher ). He is not a teacher in a school yet, he teaches many students in a academy and he is happy now.( yet, now he is teaching many students in a academy happily)
I agree that learning about life through personal experience is very good just. There is even a saying that emphasize it, seeing is believing. I also agree that personal experience gives you stronger impact than indirect experience. However, people move from novels and well-made movies, too. When I watched the movie 'Shashank Redemption' it was so great that I watched several times. After watching the movie, I believe people should not give up anytime even if it is the hardest time in their life so far. As the main actor, I forgot the name though, said, hope is a really good thing that nobody can take away from you. As I mentioned, well-made movies can move you and these give you a impact as well as personal experience.
In summary, personal experience can give you stronger impact than others' advices or indirect experience for learning about life. However, a person cannot attain everything only from personal experience and well-made movies and novels can give you same impact as well. These are the reasons why people should listen to others' opinions carefully and read various books in variety of genre. More experience, more wisdom, and less fail. That is what I believe. | |
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