▶ Your Answer : There are many arguments on teaching places about being social members in society. Sompe people think domestic education should be a role, but some others believe that it the young ought to be educated in school.
As technology develops, a lot of students are becoming selfish and self-centered people. These days, they tend to talk to others through written texting or typing words such as social network services, emails or massengers. They have given many people convenience, but also have brought negative things. One of them is a shortage of socialization. Individuals, especially youths, ought to hang out with other people, but modern people enjoy their own time alone, watching TV or playing computer games. Therefore, the voice of education for making a person as a social member is going alouder.
In my opinion, both school and a house have to be the role together, but school should be overweighed. That is because people are accustomed to staying at their homes, also the attitude inside and that outside can be different. How to make friends or talk to strange people is taught in school. In addition, the way of being a member of society is not that teachers can teach them. It is verey natural things, and so school activities should be widened such as a picnic, physical education or various circle activities and so on. If young children do the things with other pupils, they can raise >> improve가 좋을 듯 싶네요 not only cooperation, but also self-confidence by themselves.
In conclusion, parents are able to set a good example to show their children being a good social person, but, since school is the best place where many young people insufficient to be a social members, school is more responsible for the education. Thus, educational institutions have to make a variety of programs about young students to be socialized.
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