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The chart gives information about how many people live in the three
countries aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040. As a whole, the figure of western
residents was >> 주어는 the figure 입니다 fluctuated in the past, while they are predicted to increase in
the future>>수치를 적어주시면 좋을 듯 싶습니다. In spite of >> ~에도 불구하고 라는 뜻인데 일본임에도 불구하고는 너무 어색합니다 Japan, they remained stable before 2014 but it will rise
dramatically in the future. 역시 수치를 적으면 좋겠습니다
Firstly, both of western countries rose slightly between 1960 and 1980. In
case of the USA, >> 콤마 붙여주세요 it began falling sharply, >> 역시 앞에 콤마가 필요합니다 while Sweden increased drastically in 1980.
Consequently, two western ones are anticipated to rise significantly in the two
decades.
Secondly, Japan stood at almost 5 % in the past.
Meanwhile, the proportion of older people will probably continue to increase in
the next two decades in the three countries. A more dramatic rise is predicted
between 2030 and 2040 in Japan. .
서론 본론 (오버뷰+디테일) 결론 식의 글이 좋습니다 오버뷰는 간단하게 순위나 상승 혹은 하강하는 기류만 나타내주고 디테일에서 수치로 직접적인 비교를 하시면 됩니다 USA UK Netherlands Philippines UAE 등 united 혹은 복수형으로 처리되는 나라에는 앞에 the 가 붙습니다 기억해주세요 Task Achievement - 5 Coherence and Cohesion - 6 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5 5.5 예상합니다 |