University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the Internet for students to read, and so, the importance of attending face-to-face lectures has been reduced. Do you believe the use of the Internet in formal education is a good idea? What future effects will the Internet have an academic study?
Recently, while the significance of relationship between students and lectures has been reducing, most professors would like to put their lectures on their Web sites. Personally, I completely believe that it is necessary to university students for some reasons>> 학생과 강의 사이의 관계 중요성이 낮아지고 있는 반면에 교수들은 강의를 웹으로 돌리려고 한다 이 맥락은 교수들이 강의를 웹으로만 돌리려고 하는 문제와 가까운 말입니다 주어진 문제와는 의미가 다릅니다 문제에선 인터넷으로 강의를 들을 수 있게 됐는데 그게 면대면 강의의 중요성을 떨어뜨리는 결과를 낳는다 인터넷으로 강의 듣는 것이 좋은 생각이냐 아니냐에 대해 물어본 것입니다.
First of all, class materials of classes on the Internet can help widely students' understanding about lectures to be widened. This is mainly because they are able to read them many times those displayed contents on screen several times through reviewing if they could not follow the class. To be specific, For example, when if a lecture room in a university is so huge that almost students cannot >> cannot 붙여서 써주세요 concentrate perfectly on the lecture perfectly, they would will go to any places where it is available to use the Internet Internet and , could to read the missed parts of the lecture, and to grasp it thoroughly. Additionally, students can put some questions related to lectures on the professor's homepage and solve their curiosities. >> additionally 는 다른 주장을 나타내는 부사입니다 피해주세요 Therefore, most pupils would be able to comprehend absolutely their study absolutely and be satisfied with it the online lectures.
In addition, much more people would obtain easily an university degree easily in comparison with attending face-to-face lectures. >> 설명은 없네요 어떤 점이 더 쉽게 학위 취득을 할 수 있게 하나요? For example, people who do not have enough time to study, such as working wife housewives, employees, >> 세개 이상 나열 중에서 마지막 and/or 앞엔 콤마가 붙습니다 and those living in rural areas, would catch an opportunity to study through distance learning. They do not need to come go to university by themselves to see attend lectures; >> therefore 는 부사라 두 문장을 이어줄 수 없습니다 그러니 문장을 끊어서 Therefore, 로 하시던가 아니면 세미콜론을 붙여주시면 됩니다 therefore, learning through the Internet would allow a large number of pupils anywhere and anytime to make an effort anywhere and anytime in studying.
In conclusion, I definitely think that learning through computers has more advantages than attending in a lecture of college and . Therefore, it could be more popular and formal education in the future.
각 문단 첫 시작은 한 칸 들여써주세요 본문 논리 전개에선 부족한 면이 보였습니다 그치만 주장은 괜찮았네요 위에 말씀드린 조언 부분들 봐주시길 바랍니다
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