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The line graph illustrates the number of boys categorized with by two age groups and five broad sports classes; football, basketball, cricket, rugby and swimming in the UK in the period of 2010.
The most notable feature is that the largest amount of 6 to 11 year-old boys who took part in the classes was taken in football and the least amount had shown in swimming, and each value was 87 and 19 respectively. In addition, the cricket followed the lead with 45, preceding two competitors, basketball (35) and rugby (23).
When it comes to boys from 12 to 16, they showed a similar trend with the younger boys. However, in every sports category, the number of middle-aged (중년이란 뜻을 가집니다, 상당히 안맞는 표현) group occupied smaller number amount than the younger boys except for the swimming class.
Overall, it can be seen that two age groups showed similar patterns in terms of participation in sports classes in 2010, whereas there were slight differences between two.
SCORE: 5.5
Comment: 반복적으로 틀리시고 있는 amount/number 사용 헷갈리지 않는 것이 중요하겠습니다. middle aged와 같은 표현도 주의해주세요. 또한, 150자의 최소 기준치는 채우셨으나, 200자 정도라고 생각하시고 쓰시면 더 좋습니다. |