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Nowadays, many people feel that going to work or coming back from work is a time-consuming activity, so they insist employer should let people do some works at home. In this essay, I will discuss advantages and disadvantages of working at home.
At first, we need to imagine a situation to be ready for work every morning. A lot of people usually spend at least 30 minutes on preparation for work. For example, they have to eat breakfast, wear proper clothings, and sometime need time for make-up. And then they would take transportation for several minutes to arrive at their work places. If we think about how much time we need for work, it would be probably more than an hour. If we can work on in their own home, maybe we do not have to waste these time. Therefore, so it can be replaced of some effective activities for self-development, (comma) like studying a language or hobby time. Moreover, everyone has their own bio-rhythm. So, (comma) some people would better working on at night and sometimes it would make better results in work.
On the other hand, there are several drawbacks about working at home. Above all, employer can not cannot (붙여서 사용) control their employees, (comma) so it could cause some failures in important projects. Moreover, if is really important to have mind to include a same company for every employees (every 단수 취급). However, working at home means employees usually meet each other on-line, (comma) so it would be hard to establish same mind to be a member in a company. Finally, information is one of the important factors for every company. They have the obligation to protect it, but it would be hardly controlled at home.
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