▶ Your Answer : The given chart above describes the figure for cell phones and computers owned by people in six countries in the year 2003.
In general, there are 6 countries in the chart including Australia, Canada, Korea, Japan, Italy, and Finland and the numbers per 1,000 people are ranged from 0 to 140 in the chart.
In the average figures, Japan recorded the greatest figures, accounting for more than 120, and computers were slightly higher figures than mobile phones. Korea was the second highest country, showing the numbers almost 120 in total. Italy showed the third greatest position, and interestingly, both computers and mobile phones had the same numbers at exactly 80 in this country in 2003. Finland was the lowest in terms of the number of computers by stating at 20, whilst in mobile phones, Australia recorded the fewest at approximately 30.
According to the chart, surprisingly, there were three countries which accounted for having the more proportion in terms of mobile phones. On the other hand, two countries were the opposite. These countries were Australia and Japan.
Score: 6.5 Comment: Minimal mistake으로 잘 쓰셨습니다. 다만 Finland과 Australia에 대해서 쓰셨을땐 그 숫자들이 어떤 부분을 나태내고 있는지 안쓰셨습니다. 또한 Finland만이 computer과 mobile의 차이가 다른 국가 보다 휠씬 차이가 난다고 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. |