▶ Your Answer :
The table and line graph displays the
number of people who visited Wetlands State Park from July to October in 1989 and
1990.
Overall, the total number of visitors who visited Wetland State Park was decreased. Furthermore, it can be seen from the
graph that, the highest number of visitor received in Wetlands State park was in
September in 1989 and by 1990, the highest visitors month was August.
In detail, 3,000 visitors visited Wetland
State Park in July 1989 which increased drastically to reach at 5,000 visitors
in a month, whereas in 1990, July recorded at 5,000 visitors and this number
slightly rose by 1,000 visitors in August.
For the last two months of 1989, Wetlands
State Park experienced the most people who visited the park of 6,000 in September
and it decreased to 5,000 visitors by October. Meanwhile, this number of
visitors was less/smaller decreased in 1990 where it recorded at 4,000 visitors and 3,000
visitors concurrently.
Score: 7 Comment: 잘 정리를 해서 전달을 해주셨습니다. Silly mistakes에 주의 해주시기를 바랍니다. 또한 one sentence paragraph 보다는 4~6 paragraph로 내용을 정리를 해주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다. 즉, 1989~1990의 6월 부터 9월의 정보를 한 문단으로 정리를 해주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고 하셨습니다. |