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In the past, the aids helping disabled
people were not enlightened to most of people. Because they could not use
additional services (guide dogs, sign language interpretation), disabled
people's activities were limited. This has been changed since the development
of society where the recognition in helping disabilities have increased. As a
result, more organisations have formed to help with disabilities, however,
there are insufficient support by the government. This should be changed so that to the
government can ensure the compatible of accesses for disabled people.
There are many approaches for the
government to take in order to assist disabilities. For new public facilities or
any new buildings that are designed or are going to be built, the government must
ensure that all the facilities are functional for disabled people. The public
facilities such as pedestrian roads and the public parks can be improved by
renovations which the objective is for disabled people's comforts.
Furthermore, the government can repair and
renovate the structures where necessary. In a practical sense, the government
may not be able to confirm all the new buildings' projects and public
facilities for disabled people to use. Already made structures would be
difficult to renovate or rebuild, particularly historical attractions, so this
can be solved by additional services for easier access for disabilities.
Therefore, the government should be ready to improve all facilities in the case
of complaints.
In conclusion, since the enlightenment of
cooperation with the disabled people disability, many organisations have formed to help disabled
people. However, the government can be the primary responsibility for all the
accesses are to be adequate and comfortable for disabled people to use.
Score: 7.5 Comment: 잘 서술 해주셨습니다. Building and access와 관련된 measures 외에는 다른 measures에 대해서도 전달을 해주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다. 문법/문장구조에도 조금 더 신경을 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. Small/silly mistakes가 있습니다. 수고 하셨습니다. |