▶ Your Answer :
The three pictures given give the information on the gradual changes
of Queen Mary Hospital, which is located right below the Main Road, from 1960 to
2000.
In terms of 1960, the hospital only kept a single quarter of the
places below the main road. The other three 3 quarters are composed of a shopping
centre which is right next to the hospital, a car park right below the hospital,
and a farmland, evenly.
When it comes to 1980, the hospital added another block to its main
building that is a pharmacy. Adding to that, a cancer centre and nursing school
was newly constructed. Because of that, a shopping centre was replaced by a
pharmacy block and a nursing school building. <(shopping center가 아니라 farmland대신 nursing school 가 들어온 것입니다.)
After 1980, there were no new buildings.
Only the proportion of each building and location place has changed. In 2000, the main hospital main building and pharmacy block remained the same. However, the a cancer
centre was tripled, expanded to triple taking the nursing school's place. Due to the enlarged
cancer centre, the nursing school claimed a half of the car park place. Thus,
In
conclusion, between 1960 and 2000, the places below the main road which was
composed of diverse spaces has changed to the medical block
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