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Increasing
crimes are very serious problems in all over the world and many governments
have tried to find out the solutions which can prevent them. In this regard, I
will discuss what the causes are and how to solute escalating crimes.
One
of the primary reasons of the increase in crime rate is insufficient punishments and people have a tendency
to neglect about it the tendency of people to neglect it. In Korea, drunk driving is one of the serious crimes.
Also, many Koreans know it is not just a problem but a serious problem. However,
people are not only ignore the punishments of drunk driving but also the rate
of it has been increasing because the people who did drunk driving are only given a minor fine, which is not enough of a punishment finish to punish as a fine sentence not enough punishments. In addition, many
people point out the cause of increasing crimes are unsatisfactory
post-management and the rate of recidivism account for many proportions of
increasing crimes. Accordingly, many people think that the causes of escalating
crimes are insufficient punishments as well as inadequate post-managements. (이 두 문장은 결과적으로 거의 같은 말을 하고 있기 때문에 하나는 지워주시고 부연설명을 해주세요~)
When
it comes to say about the solution of rising crimes, Firstly firstly, the governments should
make a strong punishment. In Australia, drunk driving is also a serious crimes
same as like it is in Korea. However, the rate of it is remarkably low rather than Korea
because of a sufficient punishment about drunk driving. If somebody is driving
after drinking in Australia, he or she have has to pay an unimaginable amount of money as a fine.
Secondly, the governments should recruit many police officials who can mange about
criminals because, it could be difficult to manage about a repeat offender for
24 hours because there are not insufficient police officials who can work at
night. (<- 이 문장은 because~because 가 반복되기 때문에 구조를 조금 바꿀 필요가 있습니다.) Consequently, increasing crimes would be settled from strong punishments
and recruiting many police officials.
In
conclusion, many governments should ensure people to live as secure environment
without crimes so I think that these problems would disappear through
sufficient punishments and many police officials.
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