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In recent years, as the number of self-employed people have
increased, some experts wonder why this phenomenon appears as well as they are
discussing effects that this trend can cause. I will write this essay regarding
its causes and disadvantages.
These days, in Korea, there are many self-employed
people. According to recent statistics, the rate of self-employed account for
more than one fourth slightly. This figure is highly ranked among countries
involved in OECD. (절대로 절대로 절대로 절대로 절대로 이런 걸로 내용 채우지 않도록 해주세요. 한국의 자영업자 비율이 25% 이상이고 이게 OECD 국가 중 어땠느니는 전혀 중요하지 않습니다. 채점관과 독자들도 이것에 대해 전혀 관심이 없으며, 오히려 암기된 문장으로 간주될 가능성만 높아지고요. 그냥 '원인' 에만 철저히 집중해주셔야 합니다.) Some experts insist that this phenomenon is contributed by
companies because they tend to decrease employees for office automation. As a
result, the unemployment rate has increased, so people should employ themselves
for their living.
This trend can lead to several disadvantages
to society. Firstly, self-employed people are likely to fail in a few years. According
to one survey, at least more than 80% of self-employed miscarried in their business.
Therefore, they go into debt, social costs that help and support them has increased.
In addition, self-employed people are mostly related to almost restaurant business, so there are intense
competitions. Too many competitions can have detrimental effects on their
business because it produces many losers that cannot adapt to this competition (짧은 기간 내에 세 번이나 쓰였으므로 최소 한 번은 대체해주세요.).
As a result, the employment rate will get worse and people who lose their work might find it hard to make a living.
In conclusion, the reason why self-employed
people have increased is that companies and organizations are reducing to
employ people for automation. As a result, this phenomenon leads to people
intense competition, so it causes to an increase in the unemployment rate and
social costs.
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