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It is common belief that the tendency to spend
on trip is not good for spending habit. (단순히 파란 부분에서 그치는 것이 아니라, '과거와 비교해서' 라는 표현이 들어가야 합니다. 이게 논지의 핵심입니다.) However, I personally think that it is
more good for the development of the economy of world society to develop economy.
On the one hand, traveling requires lots of enough
money to enjoy eating and moving to a place. This would lead to travellers disregarding about
other expenses, such as electricity charge and tuition fee, spending much money
on traveling rather that than these. For instance, in the last year, my friends and I
went to South America tour as a graduation trip. However, the required money on
this trip, such as airplane fare and accommodation cost, was really higher that
I expected so that we had to work part-time to earn tuition fee ourselves. (이 문장 내에 생략된 전제인 '여행에 돈을 다 쏟아부어서 등록금이 부족하게 되었다' 를 넣어주셔야 합니다. 그게 직접적인 단점이니까요.)
Nevertheless, a national economy growth can
grow, with the increase in the increasing the number of travelers. This is because, the more people make a trip to
foreign countries, the more countries can increase tourism income. There is a good
example of this phenomenon in some Asian countries, such as the Philippines and
Vietnam. These countries attracted people to the best vacation spots. By doing
so, even though they are developing countries, they could earn tourism income
more than some developed countries. In this regard, the phenomenon of people spending more on travel than in the past traveling more people creates
growth in the overall world economy, which would especially be needed in more incom the
developed countries.
To sum up, when it comes to economic
revitalization, the advantages of
traveling to other countries outweigh more than this disadvantages in the world
community.
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