Research shows that business meetings and business training increasingly taking place online. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
It is commonly seen that there is an increase in the preference of online business meeting and training instead of one-by-one. There
are both merits and demerits, and I think that benefits are greater than the drawbacks.
To begin with, there are some drawbacks to business meetings and business training through the Internet. First of all, it can cause lack of relationship. There are a lot of opportunities to develop relationship with other colleagues in business meetings and trainings. In this process, employees able to improve their social network. Secondly, it is low approachable about information. In some cases, there are needs to receive feedback or correct information immediately. For example, in business training on the Internet, people who received training do not perceive their mistakes, but anyone announce the flaws directly (파란 부분은 댓글 주세요!) so the people quite difficult modify the mistakes.
On the other hand, not all aspects of this phenomenon are disadvantageous disadvantages. Online business
meetings and business training help plenty of workers. First and foremost, it
is possible to make a flexible business meeting and business training through
online. Without having to travel traveling in order to take a business meeting and training, it can be made anywhere at any time it
allows to do anywhere and whenever. In this respect, it is an efficient way.
Moreover, it can make a good quality of business meeting and training. This is
because, there are a various tools like highlighting, memos and so on as well as
it can help workers attach diagrams, videosand photos. Therefore, it would more helps other
workers’ understanding than face-to-face meetings.
In conclusion, although there are some demerits, I opine that this trend is mainly beneficial.
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