Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
There is a controversy controversial that whether artificial intelligence brings a positive impact or negative impact to us. Some people insist that mankind’s life will become more convenient thanks to artificial intelligence. Meanwhile, the other Other side argue that mankind is not prepared to accept artificial intelligence yet. In this essay, I describe both statements and my personal opinion.
According to the argument which believe that artificial intelligence bring good impact to mankind, artificial intelligence is helper in modern society. In regardless of industries, companies have huge information called by big data about customers and products. Artificial intelligence manages information faster than humans do. In addition, artificial intelligence does not make mistakes because it does not feel tired like humans do and It it is expected to be outstanding help in the fields which requires accuracy and fairness like test and court. Moreover, at disaster area like fire scene, artificial intelligence more effectively perform rescue than human. For these reasons, artificial intelligence have possibility to help mankind. (이건 굳이 안 써도 되니까, 대신 구조의 상황에서 AI가 어떻게 더 도움이되는지를 적어주시는 게 좋습니다.)
In contrast, the opposing sides insist that people are not prepared to accept artificial intelligence yet. The point of their opinion is that artificial intelligence is too cutting-edge technology for general public. The gap in knowledge of artificial intelligence cause social problems like industrial revolution. During the Industrial Revolution, there was a huge economic gap between those who had the machines which underlying production and those who did not. In the same way, it is expected that people who correctly understand computer with artificial intelligence have advantage for becoming wealthy. But People (and but so 로 문장 시작하지 마시고, 대소문자를 잘 구분해주세요~) who can not exactly use it will lose their job and the gap between rich and poor more widen. Therefore the public is not prepared for artificial intelligence, other side is worrying about it.
It is true that both views are somewhat reasonable, but and my opinion is that artificial intelligence is still premature. With the development of technology, countless jobs have disappeared. At now, fourth industrial revolution, including artificial intelligence, is approaching. It is expected that the most existing job will be disappeared and there will be a large number of unemployed people. In addition, the government Government will tax an enormous amount for the unemployment benefits, also have to face up to the anti-technology riots. Therefore, I insist that artificial intelligence should be used in the near future after years of education and training.
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