There are various concerning that as much as countries developed, people can get any stuffs in all around the world, and think world is getting more unified. I think it has more advantages than drawbacks, and this essay will discuss the reasons of my opinion.
To begin with, the reason why world is getting similar to each other is mainly globalisation is accelerating due to improvement in relationship among nations, hence people in all around the world could not be away from national trend. In addition, as long as the condition of correlation is good, infrastructure and transportation would be develop. Naturally more transport would be constructed and run more frequently, Hence getting news and trend beyond the borders would be no longer difficult than the past.
In addition, having similar products has their own reason. To illustrate a good example of this, people mostly buy Samsung or Apple smart phone if they should choose globally. This could seem monopoly in one industry, however, the benefit from this is certainly bigger than advantage. As develop as in small industry, world organization will regulate the international rules of those. The barrier to buy or start a new stuff would be standardized, eventually all benefit is going to the consumers. Through this, individuals do not need to concern the details of rules that products have in one nation, even if they travel overseas.
To sum up, thanks to development of globalisation, people can have the best products in the world easily. The product that is adaptable in anywhere, and usable is definitely the positive effect we have.
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