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This table chart gives information on the change of popularity in 7 >> 10 이하 수치가 아닌 숫자는 웬만하면 영어로 작성해주세요 seven different functions of mobile phone functions between 2006 and 2010.
To begin with, it is clear that, across the whole period shown, making calls was the most popular function of mobiles. On the other hand However, there was a significant rise in numbers of people used mobile phones for other purposes. >> 이렇게 뭉뚱그려 쓰시면 안 됩니다
The most common feature of cell phones was to make calls at almost 100% in all the three years, followed by to exchanging text messages and to taking photos. By contrast, only on the average of about 18% of people used their mobiles to listen to music.
It is also noticeable that a number of people started to use mobile phones to play games, search the Internet>> Internet의 I는 대문자입니다, and record video over 4 years. Although there was no record for use of the Internet and video recording in 2006, the figures for the two functions increased dramatically by nearly 2 times and 4 times respectively,>> 콤마 빼주세요 from at 41% and 9% in 2008 to at 73% and 35% in 2010. The number of people who played games with mobile phones also showed a marked rise by 25% in 2008.
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