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Education is a momentous factor for students' future and
their pathway. Henceforth, people tend to take full schooling - from primary to
university - for granted, and they think it certainly necessary to become a
good society member. Although some people argue that the government must
support full>>뒤에 tuition fee 를 수식하는 말로 썼습니다 tuition fees fully, I think I think 보단 ,in my opinion, 이 좋습니다 it is unrealizable, since it needs
astronomical money.
Studying from elementary to college requires lots of school
expenses. Only few people can afford it, but many others cannot. Some pupils
even abandon their study on an account of economic condition. Although there are
diverse loan goods for education expenses, it is just an>> 이미 another에 단수의 뜻이 내포되어 있습니다 another burden to
families having one or more children. Yet, if they finish their learning with
the government's subsidies, they can be a great human resource of nation and it
also can help to promote national interests.
However, it is virtually impossible to implement that
assists all of the students because of limitation of the government's budget.
Usually, one person is taught for about 15 years or more, including university.
If the government aid every person in the country, they should cost tremendous
amount of finance. It means the administration has no choice but to collect
more taxes from people. The soaring of taxation could affect to not only
household economy, but also national economy.
In conclusion, tutelage has a significant impact on development
of healthy society and nation state. Nevertheless, providing all the supports
for the public's education is not viable as it demands huge funds. Therefore,
the government should consider firstly as to the things such as vitalizing of
scholarship and reduction of tuition fee, and so on. 바쁘신 와중에 부탁드려 죄송합니다^^;; 시험 잘보세요~~~ -------------------- 글 구성이 좋게 됐습니다 딱딱 본인의 의견을 명료하게 잘 설명해주셨네요 본문 1과 2의 내용이 겹치지 않게 연관성이 있게 연결된 부분도 좋구요 단어 사용도 좋았습니다 잘 쓰셨습니다
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