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140209 캠브릿지9권 Test3 Task1 시간제한X 단어검색O (Composition, more or less)
The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
These pie charts illustrate the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections records >> predicted records 은 어떨까요? for 2050. The age is divided into three parts with 0-14 years, 15-59 years and over 60 years.
In 2000, it is clear from the figure that Yemen is more younger country than Italy. Almost half proportion of the nation in Yemen is 0-14 age group, while just under a quarter populations are under 15% in Italy. And >> and or but also so 문두에 쓰지 않는 접속사입니다 most of the remaining in Yemen is 15-59 years with 46.3%. But 위와 마찬가지입니다 However, 를 써주세요 the biggest part of Italy’s chart is the 15-59 age group(61.6%), and just under a fourth is over 60 age group. 너무 길어서 끊어드렸습니다 Meanwhile, just a very small percentage of the population in Yemen is that. >> 무슨 말인지 정확히 해주시기 바랍니다
In the projection >> prediction for 2050, both countries would have considerable changes in the compositions of the population. Firstly, in Yemen, there is a significant increase on 15-59 years from 46.3% in 2000 to 57.3% in 2050. But However, a great decrease is on under 15 age group. >> however는 부사이므로 문장을 이어줄 수 없어서 마침표를 찍었습니다 it fell by over 1 in 10 per cent, while over 60s would have a slight increase. In contrast in Italy, there is a dramatic rise on the over-60-year group, rising from 24.1% to 42.3% in the projections. But under 15 age and 15-59 age group would show some decreases, with 2.8% and 15.4% respectively. Italy’s Italian 15-59 years group has the greatest difference in these pie charts.
Overall, during five decades, we can predict both two countries are going to old country more or less >> 보시면 두 그래프의 공통점은 15세 이하 그룹이 줄어든 것, 노년층의 비율이 늘어난 것이라고 볼 수 있습니다 다시 작성해보시길 바랍니다 .
보시면 그래머 오류가 꽤 있습니다 한 번 제대로 잡으면 잘 틀리지 않는 부분들이 많으니 많이 보시길 바랍니다 또한 수일치에 주의해주세요 또한 Task1 치고 글이 많이 긴 편인 듯 싶습니다 에세이를 위해 적정량의 글을 쓰시는 연습도 해보시길 바랍니다 Task Achievement - 6 Coherence and Cohesion - 6 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5 6.0 예상합니다
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