▶ Your Answer :
Because many countries have different leaving customs according to their culture, it could be the causes of the a difficulty to understand each other. So, some people argue that people's language should be same. I also agreed that people should have a common language to understand each other better/effectively conveniently.
To begin with, as people use the common language of in their conversation, they can reduce misunderstanding from the language difference. For example, in modern society, many countries have continued transports to buy or sell their products for with other countries. As this process, some of them suffered from the language problem because they cannot could not conveyed their meaning of their conversation. In addition, some people feared to meet foreign people because of the language diffenence. In this regard, using only one language identification can be convenient for the transport exchange of products and meeting foreigners.
On top of that, it can prevent the problem that understanding the means for the process of commnuincation ?????. For instance, people sometimes tend to fight each other because of the misunderstanding when they are communicateing. Moreover, some people also commit a crime in foreign country because they cannot understand the local language. (<-예가 있나요? what kinds of crimes..???) If people's language become identification ? , crime rate would be reduced for with good understanding immediately. So, languadge identification has a benefit as it prevents a crime that caused in foreign country.
To sum up, it is evident that language difference is inevitable facts from many people. Otherwise, common language can reduce many unconvenient parts form from the people's daily life and economical activity. So, I agree with the idea of using a common language as it is very useful for people's life.
SCORE: 4.5-5
Comment: 내용이 전반적으로 논리적이지 못합니다. 다른 언어때문에 범죄가 일어난다. Why???? 세계적으로 이슈가 되고 있는 구체적인 예를 들면 좋을 것 같습니다. 전반적인 문법적 실수나 어색한 단어 사용에도 주의해주세요. |