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Due to the increasing interest in the welfare for older people, many nursing homes are built nationwide. As a result, senior citizens can choose where they could live whether and who they live with; their adult children or in a nursing home, so some older people stay in nursing homes and others live with their families. I think it is better for senior citizens living in nursing homes.
There are many reasons why it is better for senior citizens to live in nursing homes. Firstly, older people can meet people similar age groups as them and become friends easily, so they do not feel lonely. Secondly, nursing homes provide several programs for old people, such as leisure, receation and studying. Old people often feel isolated from society, (<-no comma) because the most cultural industriesy focus on taste of young people, so (so의 반복이 많습니다. 다른 표현으로 대체 가능! e.g. therefore/thus/hence..) they do not have the opportunity to enjoy 무엇을? 목적어?, but old people who live in nursing homes cannot feel a sense of alienation, (<-no comma) since they provide various programs for the elderly.
Finally, they can receive a high quality of care satisfactorily. Elderly people are physically weak, so they need special and systematic care. However, if they live with their family, they might have to stay alone during the day, (<-no comma) because their adult children should work for their living/supporting their familiy. However, nursing homes have trained caregivers, so they can receive care all day. This is also good for families, (<-no comma) because their adult children do not need to worry for their parents while working.
In conclusion, senior citizen needs for attention, so it is better living in nursing homes, (<-no comma) because they can receive enjoy several programs that nursing homes provide, receive careful care and make friends.
SCORE: 5.5-6
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