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As time goes by, the importance of education is getting bigger. Accordingly, students' personality is out of focus of adults. However, personality is more important than education in young people's life. Then, which way is more effective among studying with the parents or in the school?
To begin with, learning how to be a good member of society is widely considered as the best way ?? 무엇이 최고의 방법..? 좋은 사회인원이 되는것을 배우는 것이 최고의 방법으로 여겨진다?. Young people usually spend most of their most time with their parents. It means that children have a lot of time to communicate with their parents. Through this communication, students can be taught how to live and how to deal with some problems they sometimes face with. Moreover, for young people, their parents are most affective ? effective? How..? 어떻게 효과적인지 문맥상 상당히 애매한 표현입니다. people. Therefore, young people mimic their parents who they think as the greatest 애매한 표현 people, (<-no comma) unconsciously. In other words, children behave like what the parents do.
Second of all, it has been argued that teaching children is the role of school. Some people say that to teaching both academic and personality is school's duty. There are many rules in school and if students do something against the rules, they get penalty. Through this process, young people can learn which behavior is good and which one is not. Also, this process is applied in society as well, so young people can absorb the rules naturally. Furthermore, there are various different kinds of students. Therefore, it is easy for children to understand how to be good members in society which consist of various people.
To conclude, in my opinion, the roles of both parents and school are very necessary to children. In addition, I strongly believe that there are roles for each of them. Therefore, rather than choosing only one thing, using both relevantly is the most effective way.
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Comment: 전반적으로 내용이 단조로우며, 상당히 애매한 표현들이 있습니다. |