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The
two pie charts illustrates five types of energy used in an average Australian
household and emitted greenhouse gas from this energy use.
Overall,
the most significant source of using energy is heating, whereas water heating
is the largest part of greenhouse gas emissions. Likewise, in both charts, cooling
is the least source of consuming energy and in gas emission emitting.
Energy
is used for heating and water heating comprised of 42% and 30% respectively,
which together accounted for over half the consumption consuming of energy. On the other
hand, in the greenhouse gas emissions, water heating and other appliances are
composed of 32% and 28% which also occupy half of the chart.
With regards
to third largest proportion part of both charts, other appliances is the third source of
using energy, while heating is third in greenhouse gas emissions. Furthermore, the
least remaining parts of the two charts are similar: refrigeration, lighting
and cooling. <(percentage을 주시면 좋을 것 같습니다)
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