Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?
There are fierce disagreements about the idea that government should spend money on roads and motorways rather than public transportation. Even though it has well-founded reasons, I also disagree with the statement. I firmly believe the government should focus more on public transportation since it is a more eco-friendly solution.
To begin with, these days, more and more people are driving their own cars because of the many reasons, but mostly convenience. However, the problem is each car emits a considerable amount of CO2. That is why the government should spend money on better public transportation infrastructure and services. Compared to driving own cars, using transportation, (쉼표는 꼭 필요한 경우에만 넣어주셔야 합니다.) such as bus and subway, is more beneficial to our natural environment. If the government promotes the awareness of using transportation, along with some practical solutions, public transit use will rise. (이 마지막 문장은 그 자체로는 아무 의미를 지니지 않습니다. awareness, 그리고 practical solutions 의 구체적인 양상에 관해 서술할 수 있어야 풍부한 답안이 되어요.)
Moreover, in many urban areas, traffic congestion is a major issue. Especially, during the rush hours, such as early morning and around 6 pm, a majority of people have experienced experience a traffic jam. Some might have to stick on the road for hours regardless of distance. For the solution to this, the government have to limit the number of cars on the road, which means more people have to use public transportation. Focusing more on improving the system, such as making more bus lanes or, discount on the fee, traffic congestion is going to be alleviated.
To conclude, even though many people believe it is better to invest more on roads, I disagree with the idea. In my perspective, it is more persuasive to spend by spending government money on public transportation, since it is beneficial for our environment and also resolves traffic congestion.
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