Given is these maps to show how the road of the city hospital changed over the research period from 2007 to 2010. The most striking trend is that main roads keep unchanged, but facilities around the hospital were improved to help people to access there more conveniently.
Turning to the detail, Ring Road (대한민국에서 '올림픽대로' 가 하나의 고유명사이듯이, 영어에서도 로드까지 싹 묶어서 하나의 고유명사로 보시면 됩니다. 즉 대문자 시작이죠. 다른데에도 다 수정해주세요!) road surrounding the hospital was connected to City road via Hospital road in 2007. After three years, the junctions of Hospital road were changed to a roundabout, which means there is two roundabouts to get there.
Also, bus stops were in both sides of Hospital road, with three each three, but it was deleted (delete 의 경우 컴퓨터에서 파일을 삭제할 때 쓰이는 표현이라, 여기의 경우 적절하지는 않습니다. 차라리 remove 등이 낫고요.). Instead, a bus station was newly constructed in the west part of the road, connecting both roundabouts.
In terms of car park, parking lot was enlarged by making new public car park on the right side of the hospital in 2010. The place that was originally used for both staff and public became was become only for staff in the hospital.
총평: (7/7/6/6) 6.5
내용분석은 잘 해주셨고, 어휘 문법도 크게 문제는 없었기 때문에 기본적으로 좋은 점수를 기대해볼만한 것 같습니다. 어휘 문법에서도 7점에서 한 끗 차이여서, 둘 중 하나만 채점관에 따라 7로 올라가도 task 1 총점은 7.0까지는 가능해보이네요. 수고하셨습니다 :)