Nowadays, environmental problem is a hot potato around the world. Some claim that the main environmental issue is the reduction of specific species of plants and animals. On the other hand, others there are those who (이런 식으로 쓰면 other 의 반복을 방지할 수 있습니다.) believe there are more crucial things.
It is not deniable that many kinds of plants and animals in the wilderness are facing the risk of disappearance disappearing. It is said that it is because of the climate change. For instance, the number of polar bears has been significantly decreased in a few years. The loss of some species can cause another loss since it can destroy the food chain in nature. For example, if mosquitos get disappeared, spiders lose loss their food. Then, if all the spiders die in hunger, spider-eating insects can starve. (이 내용과 관련해서 prey 라는 단어는 거의 반 필수로 쓰신다고 보시면 됩니다.)
In contrast, those on the other side consider the loss of any species is not the most important environmental problem. To elaborate it, they insist melting iceberg or fine dust blowing can be more important than it. For example, even without mosquitos, spiders can find other food to eat instead of mosquitos. In other words, they can seek substitutes. By contrast, if iceberg melts in the same speed of this moment, the sea level will increase exceedingly. It will cause much bigger problem such as loss of land to live. (초록색에 대해 논하는 것은 이 문단 내에서 크게 중요하지 않습니다. 그냥 파란색 쪽을 강화하는데 집중해주세요~)
To conclude, the controversy about the environment if considerably important now as human beings are also one of the inhabitant of the earth. In my point of view, those problems that the statement and I have represented are all connected together. Thus, they will need to be solved together.
총평: (6/7/6/7) 6.5
어휘 관련해서, prey, victim 등은 본론1에 매우 용이하게 쓰일 수 있습니다. 그 점을 참고해서 넣어주세요~task 2에서는 대주제 (과학, 환경 등) 마다 사용될 수 있는 어휘의 폭이 비슷비슷한 편인데, 그걸 나중에 따로 정리해놓으시는 것도 도움이 될 겁니다. 수고하셨습니다 :)
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