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It has long been worldwide noticed that the professional sport players earn a immense outcomes and money than other professions. This issue is highlighted as such successful sport players attains endure both applauds and blames at the same time. Some people considers the phenomenon with as reasonable aspects, but some others have contradicting ideas. In my belief, though, it is justifiable that sports stars are paid off more than other professions.
The most positive viewpoint of a professional sport player gaining more financial rewards >> 이미 충분히 앞에서 말해서 굳이 이런 말을 다시 해주지 않아도 됩니다 comes out from their great risk in careers. Most players have experienced injuries during their training and games. Sometimes, severe injuries clog a player from participating their sport activity, which is results in the end of their career as a player. For instance, Lee Chung Young, a Korean football player, was out of from the whole 2012/2013 seasons due to an injury, his broken leg. He interviewed that he underwent the hard time, thinking of retirement. Not only injury risk, the duration of player’s prime is often lasts much less than those of other occupations. Likewise, it is only few players that overcome the innumerable difficulties to be placed themselves on the top class, and they deserve prices rewards for their hard works.
Detractors of such an opinion say that sport players earn too much monetary materials, comparing with other professional jobs. It is simply because the sports market is overblown in evaluating successful players. For instance, Gareth Bale, who now plays for the club ‘Real Madrid’, transferred from Tottenham Hotspur for 91 million Euros. For this shocking news, the legendary French football player Zinedine Zidane announced “No player can be valued to that extent that much, this is happening because the sport market is overestimated.” In short, perspectives, in the contrary, displays the unfairness of the sport players’ rewards.
To conclude, it is controversial that famous athletic players athletes are more excessively paid excessively, which is a way more than other professions. However, I firmly agree that any successful professions, including world-class players, are adequate to be selected for gaining enormous salaries as their effort to become top players is chiefly demanding.
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