▶ Your Answer : The prevalence of golobalization is sure to have far-reaching effects on society. From this aspect, a contentious issue is raised whether the pros of teaching a foreign language to primary
school students are far more than to secondary school students or not. In this essay, pros will be
addressed as follows.>> 미스 스펠이 있었지만 너무나도 오타인게 확연해서 바꿔드리고 표시 따로 안 했습니다 (atudent, addredded)
The acquisition of a second language depends on timing. Considering the fact that children's thought
has strong vitalization, the high efficiency of mastering a foreign language is expected, >> 접속사 앞 콤마 넣어주시길 바랍니다 because younger brain is more suitable for learning. For example, 85% of bilingual people has responsed that they learned a second language before they are 10. Therefore, a high number of students, who are good at foreign language, >> 문장 중간에 나온 수식은 콤마로 서로 띄워주는 것이 좋습니다 콤마가 없는 문장인 러닝센텐스라는 문법이 있지만 아카데믹한 글에선 that 이나 콤마를 중요하게 여깁니다 can be produced by primary school more than secondary school at the same period.
In addition, education of language demands a large amount of time. With the era of overflowing
education, middle school or high school students have no room for learning a second language, >> 역시 접속사 앞 콤마를 넣어줍니다 since a great deal of the pupils struggles >> 복수라 단수동사를 지웠습니다 with the other subjects which are crucial to pass >> pass도 적절하지만 entre가 더욱 좋다고 생각됩니다 a well-known university. Even though they study the language such as English or Japanese, it is just a process of the memorizing exams. However, learning a foreign language as early as possible has a drawback. Bilingual children are slower to acquire vocabulary than are monolinguals, >> 접속사 앞 콤마입니다 because their brain is destined to do hard work which deals with couple of languages.
In a nutshell, second-language education to the elementary school students would be a huge task for
them,>> 문장이 길어진다면 콤마로 문장을 전치사 앞을 나눠 쉬어가는 시간을 가져 생각을 정리하는 비문법적인 역할이 있고 ~하면서와 같은 동시동작을 표현해주는 콤마의 역할로 써주는 것이 좋겠습니다 considering their ability to grasp both side of words. Nonetheless, an advantage that children can be placed on the most efficient way to be a bilingual person overwhlems the disadvantage. Furthermore,
teachers have to concern whether secondary school students have enough time to learn a foreign
language or not.
전에 제가 점수를 잘 드렸다고 했는데 괜히 잘 드린게 아니네요 확실히 글을 구성하시는게 잘하신다고 느껴집니다 뒤로 갈수록 집중력에 처음보단 약해지는게 일반적인 상황인 듯 후반부에서 없던 실수가 보이지만 잘 쓰셨습니다
Task Achievement - 8 Coherence and Cohesion - 8 Lexical Resource - 7 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 7 7.5 예상합니다
아래 쓰신 코멘트에 답을 드리자면 우선 예를 든다면 He is taller than me 이 문장은 엄연히 말해 정확하지 않은 문장입니다 본래는 He is taller than I am 이게 정확한 표현입니다 than 뒤에도 주어 동사가 있는 구조가 나와야 하는데 말씀하신 문법에선 혹시 than 과 be 사이에 주어가 없었나 여쭤보고 싶습니다 혹은 than them who are 에서 목적어와 관계대명사가 생략되거나 하는 등의 꼴이 나타난 것으로 보입니다 충분하지 못한 답변이라 죄송합니다.. 그리구 저는 그냥 아이엘츠로 고생했던 경험이 있는 평범한 학생입니다~ |