▶ Your Answer :
The pie charts
illustrate the percentage of three groups, including 0 to 14, 15 to 59, and
over 60 years group in Yemen and Italy from 2000 to 2050.
According to the
first pie chart, in Yemen, the figure of the 0 to 14 group will decrease by about
13% to 37% between 2000 and 2050, which will be situated in the second position. On
the other hand, the percentage of the 15 to 59 group will increase to 57.3%, which is
the largest rate in all ages. It will be over ten times as many as the rate of the over 60 years old+
group.
Turning to the
next pie chart, in Italy, 60+ years group had about a fifth of total population
in 2000. However, the figure will increase to 42.3%, which are nearly the same as many
as that of the 15 to 59 group.
To sum up, there
is an opposite trend between Yemen and Italy in predicting the future
populations. In Yemen, the populations of the 15 to 59 group will increase to over 50%
of total populations, while in Italy, the figure of 15 to 59 group will
decrease to under 50% of total populations.
전반적인 내용은 좋았습니다 하지만 그룹을 말해놓고 먼저 말한 그룹을 the former group 후자는 the latter group 등을 사용해 어휘의 다양성을 보여주면 어떨까 싶습니다 또한 문제에서 그룹이 어떤 그룹인지 주어졌기에 the 를 써줍니다 Task Achievement - 7 Coherence and Cohesion - 7 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 6 6.5 예상합니다 |