At tThese days, advertisement is such an important matter in modern society since the purpose of advertisement is to influence people to take an expected action. As a result, more people are influenced by advertisement consciously or unconsciously. Thus, (comma) I want to analyze the pros and cons (academic essay에서는 pros and cons라는 표현을 사용하지 않습니다. advantages/disadvantages) of the advertisement.
Some people believe that advertisement hasve contributed tremendously to the development of our daily lives in terms of introducing very innovative products which radically change the way we live in a positive way. Moreover, (comma) we are bombarded with a number of products which and sometimes we cannot even recognize the products are on the market. Without the help of advertisement, it will be hard for us to choose a proper products which can serve our needs well. Therefore, (comma) advertisement is a necessary element in our life from the perspective of helping us to decide which product we should buy by providing a necessary information about the product to us.
However we also need to dwell on the possible consequence which an advertisement might bring to our daily lives. If we think about the purpose of advertisement which is to boost products' consumption to increase a company's profit, we can naturally estimate what kind of impact it will cause be. For example, the company which only pursueing profit want to maximize the revenue by adopting an advertisement having mentally detrimental or toxic content to the target customers. Thus, (comma) we should regulate the advertisement which do not considering the negative effect on to people and censor the advertisement to prevent 무엇을? 목적어? .
In conclusion, we have seen advertisement which can be conducive to our life. Advertisements could be usuful as long as it is controlled to enhance the function to provide information to customers and restrain the desire to pursue profit by neglecting the side effects.
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