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People need to learn how to be good members of society to live in the world because we do not live alone, (<-no comma) and we live together. Some people think that children need to learn from their parents. On the other hand, others insist that it is better for them to study this (무엇..? this는 무엇을 지칭합니까 구체적으로 표기하는 것이 좋습니다) in school. Now, I will discuss both these views and give what is my opinion.
Firstly, a lot of people think that the best teacher for children is their parents. After humans are born, they tend to follow and learn from their mom and dad naturally. Additionally, they learn all of foundations and basics to survive and work from their parents.
However, others disagree with that opinion. They prefer to go to school to learn how to be good members of society because school is education institute where we can learn. We can learn almost many things in there. Especially, we study with other student in school. It means that school has a lot of classes and groups. Through them, students can learn what is society because class or small group are also one of the little society.
In my opinion, going to school is better to study how to be good members of society than learning from parents because school is similar with society. There has are regulation, people who are smarter than me, (<-no comma) and student who has a financial problem, (<-no comma) and rich. In there, people can learn how to survive in the class by themselves. For example, my friend who did not go to school have a trouble to act in society because he have has not ever become member of group.
These are two different views about the topic and one reason why I agree with idea that going to school is the better way to study how to be good members of society.
SCORE: 5
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