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Nowadays, the world has been becoming due to globalization, and the number of people who travel abroad is increasing, thereby some arguments occur that whether people who come to other country should accept the rule of the country they are visiting or the foreign countries should be generous to visitors who don’t do not (다 풀어서 사용) know about their culture well occur. I will discuss about both of the arguments
To begin, People have heard about the old saying, 'when you are in Roma, do as Romans do'. It might be right way, of course, to stay in the foreign country. However, it is not possible to follow the behavior way of the inhabitants perfectly because visitors have lived in a different culture. If people want to experience a variety of customs abroad, they need to try so as to know about basic manners of the country, (comma) for example, (<- no comma) the way of greeting and shaking hands. In Korea, if Koreans greet an older person then them, they should bow to him or her and before old people hand out their hand to shack ask for shaking hand with each other, it is rude that young people hand out their hand first.
On the other hand, the host countries should understand visitors no matter where they came from due to some customs which are difficult to be accepted by them. Therefore, they should not be forced to do as inhabitants do and thing is, that they don’t do not have any duty to do it.
In conclusion, people should consider about each other’s cultures and customs. It would reduce their conflict and be a win-win situation for each other.
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