▶ Your Answer : The line graph illustrates how the percentage of radio and television audiences changed/fluctuated/shifted throughout the day in 1992 from 6 am to 6 pm in the UK. Overall, many people tend to listen to the radio in the morning and while most viewers watched on television during the at night. In the morning, the percentage of radio audiences rose dramatically during in a short period, reaching peak at around about 30 percent at about around 9 pm. There was only a slight an increase on television viewers around the same time. audiences slightly.
In/During/Around. When it was/ the afternoon, there was a gradual decrease gradually on radio listeners while the percentage of television audiences skyrockets reach a high of to 50 percent at 8 pm. However,(comma!!!) the audience started to gradually decrease immediately after 8 pm. after that there was a decrease gradually. The percentage of radio listeners declined throughout afternoon. In the At night, both radio and television audiences tended to downward trend. declined to under ten percent.
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